Andrew Braaksma's essay " Some Lessons from the Assembly Line" is about the struggle he went through going to work for twelve hour days in the summer and going to college during the school year. I feel that I can relate to Braaksma's situation because I do the same thing I work really hard and I go to school full time.
Currently I attend the Art Institute of Sacramento full time as a student in the baking and pastry program. I also work part time at Mountain Mikes. When I am not at school or at work I am usually at home doing homework. It is hard to try and do everything because I hardly ever have time to do my homework I am usually staying up til midnight or later trying to get it done. Then I only get about four to five hours of sleep because I have to drive two hours to school so I get up at five in the morning to start getting ready. It is definitely a tough situation but I feel that it is totally worth it in the long run because I am getting a good education and learning early what it is like to live in the real world.
I think you were able to answer the prompt in some way and got your viewpoint across. However, it wasn’t very descriptive and was on the short side. I wanted to know more about how your troubles have taught you the lessons of the real world. I can’t tell if you understood his purpose or not, it kind of left me confused and wanting to know more. It seems like you have a lot on your plate, your one tuff cookie.
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ReplyDeleteI felt like you understood what Andrew was talking about but did not know how to express it due to your description of what he went through. Your personal story though could have been a little longer with more description. Great job though! ;)
I think you answered the prompt well, but I feel like their could have been a little bit more information, details, or dialogue to give your prompt a little more depth.
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